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When will the cloud in my head clear?
Stuck in the middle of a messy riddle.
Tongue twisters told me not to toy with my mind.
I have already wasted a thousand years and said “sorry” a million times.
Chasing you became a constant dream,
Waking up to find myself alone again.
Teary mattress covers over me.
Feels like Water board, feels like you’re torturing me.

Waiting foolishly in the wind because this is meant to be.
Waiting childishly in the rain because you are what I need.
What day is today? I’ve lost count in my misery.
Tick tock, the clock replaces the rhythm my heart once beat.
Now it’s a hollow space inviting dark thoughts and sinister dreams.

While I sleep I feel you kiss, but see your blood soaked teeth.
The night must have begun the loop has somehow started again.
Every day it gets worse I lose a parts of me.
I open my eye to find out that I can’t even see.
God as muted the world, for me it’s such a bliss.
Never feel so good to feel no more.
This is the way I leave.
This is by far the weirdest darkest thing I've wrote. I was in a dark place when I started this piece but now I'm fine so struggled to finish this ,but here it it. Also can't seem to think up a good name for this, please comment if you think this should be called something else :)

Thank you.
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Surviveroflove Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
You wright your best work when your high on a certain emotion.  The title is perfect and im so sorry about what you've goon through. :hug:
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Fan-Gogh Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013  Professional General Artist
It's alright, just life being life I guess. one thing I would say is crap like this makes me stronger each and every time. i agree with you about the emotion thing though. All of my artworks feed of emotions, if it doesn't then it's not really good at all. - btw thank you so much for reading and commenting on my writings :) I hope non of them made you feel bad or anything. they are usually sad.
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Surviveroflove Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013
Its ok. :)
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parchmentgirl Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student Writer
To all current submissions in :iconwriters-extrodinaire: critique folder [link]
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love the way you write Franklin, I'm saddened by the fact that you once felt that bad!!! :iconsadhugplz: But it's good to know it's in the past!!! :love: ... I think the name is suitable for this :nod:
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Fan-Gogh Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Professional General Artist
You know, I'm kinda glad that I had a hard past, I've been through pain and hunger as a child. And emotional damage obviously shown here. but That just makes me almost impossible to break in the future.

And thank you for faving and liking my writing style. my style is I don't have a style :)
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ohh dear!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconsadhugplz::iconflyingheartsplz:I'm sad to know what you've been through!!! :tears: But you're definitely right :tighthug: Hadn't lived what you lived, you wouldn't be who you are right now!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconsweethugplz::iconflyingheartsplz:

Well, you might not have a "style", like you say (I don't know about that, because I'm not a writer or inclined to writing at all, actually), but you write beautifully!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::love::iconflyingheartsplz:
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Fan-Gogh Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Professional General Artist
Thank you :) and you are right about me being who I am is caused by everything that has happened to me. I got a story to tell you, remind me to tell you later, if I forget, its a story about a rock and it's pretty horrible and it haunted me for years but it's just a example of things that changes our lives.

good new! (not as good as the new in your group journal- that is EPIC btw)

anyways, so I started to write a poem, using "Escape in Dream" drawing as inspiration, It's also called "Escape in dream" I like some of the lines in it so far, just got to find time to finish it and tidy it up to make sure everything flows and makes sense! :) I met someone on dA a very lovely girl, we talk about poem and stuff alot. She had a poem which talked about escaping from stuff, (aka everything bad) and I thought the picture I drew shown that quite well so I sent her the link but it turns out she is blind. :( I didn't know what to say, I don't understand, because she also does photography as well and replies to my messages. Someone must be helping her out with these but anyway that's not the point, the point is I thought I'll write a poem on it instead so she can enjoy it in a different way and also I might write a description of the drawing if I can find time, describe the colours and stuff, because she said she can still remember. anyway that's a bit depressing story but....
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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You would be surprised of how many abilities blind people have, my dear Franklin!!! :love: ... Still, it's wonderful that you want to taylor your work in a way to make it more accessible to her, that's a beautiful thing to do indeed!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconsweethugplz::iconflyingheartsplz: ... I'm sure she will appreciate your gesture!!! :love:
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Fan-Gogh Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Professional General Artist
Yeah, she is excited to read it! :) I excite to hear what she thinks
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